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 Post Posted: Sat Nov 24, 2018 2:58 pm 
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I wrote Looking for a Friend in Hellabad for Vendanna's latest contest (thank you so much for the idea :twisted: ) and would like everyone's collective opinion.

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     Post Posted: Mon Dec 03, 2018 7:14 pm 
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    I liked it!

    I was a bit confused about one thing. Who exactly are they buying rations from? Is there like a rations demon or something? A small thing, but for some reason it bugged me. I mean, you did make of point of saying that they get hungry like normal and rations never pop for them, and that they have to buy everything they need, which is why everyone robs everyone else but...where do the rations come from then?

    Seriously, though, I liked it.

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     Post Posted: Mon Dec 03, 2018 11:01 pm 
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    Thanks for the feedback. I limited too much when I was deciding what to put in. You can only know what I wrote, not what I thought.


    Rations don't pop next to each unit like in Erfworld, they pop in a central location and gluttonous units have to haul it out and give it to the rest.

    This being Hellabad, they keep the best and sell the rest. They take that money and pay rent at rooms that are guarded at dawn or buy weapons or whatever.

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