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 Post Posted: Mon Feb 11, 2019 11:48 am 
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I was sooo happy to see my submission get selected. :D My first thought was actually boredom, "Oh, wait, I've read this before. Give the writer a few schmuckers to congratulate them and move on." Then, "Oh wait. -- I AM the writer. Squee!!!" I positively danced.

Thanks to everyone who has encouraged my writing. I made this post to get a few more analytical comments. Stuff like my observations,

"Not enough attribution. Even though there's only three speakers and two are talking about the third, use at least two attributions per three people."

"While the setting did not lend itself to large amounts of description, I felt it moved too quickly. Describe the characters feelings more in terms of actions they would be taking to break up the trialogue more."

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