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 Post subject: The Last Turn
 Post Posted: Fri Oct 28, 2016 9:22 pm 
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Part 1
Part 2
Part 3
Part 4
Part 5
Part 6
Part 7
Part 8
Part 9
Part 10
Part 11
Part 12
Part 13
Part 14
Part 15
Part 16
Part 17
Part 18
Part 19
Part 20

Hey everyone, this is my ongoing fan fiction - The Last Turn. I'm going to use this post as an alternate comments section for the entire story and as a table of contents. Let me know how you're liking the story, what you think of my writing style, and any spelling errors/plot errors you find particularly egregious.

Feedback is always welcome, negative and positive! Also, check out my other ongoing web serial if you like:

The Wandering Inn


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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    Not bad. Glad you posted a thread, because I had no idea this was here.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    I liked it very much. Plenty of food for thought.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    Hey, just a heads up to anyone curious -- I usually try to update this story on Mondays and Fridays, but I'm not going to this Monday. I haven't written enough and I can't focus enough to write with the election tomorrow. I'll post on Friday, unless, y'know, there's no point since America's doomed.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    I'm glad there is still a reason to live and write after the elections :)

    Loving it!! ^_^
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    I've been really enjoying The Last Turn. :)

    It's use of Erfworld's relative time is fascinating, and I like the Reapin' -> Reavers Mass Effect reference (I'm guessing that's what you were going for?)

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    Hey glad you're all liking the story! Thank you WurmD...or Dario or whoever you really are for donating! It means a lot!

    And yes, Reapin is a reference to a certain group of armageddon-bringing space monsters. There's one other reference there as well -- Lady Vina's just a name I picked 'cause it sounded good, but a certain Warlady's name has significance. Anyways, thanks for reading!

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    pirateaba wrote:
    Hey glad you're all liking the story! Thank you WurmD...or Dario or whoever you really are for donating! It means a lot!

    And yes, Reapin is a reference to a certain group of armageddon-bringing space monsters. There's one other reference there as well -- Lady Vina's just a name I picked 'cause it sounded good, but a certain Warlady's name has significance. Anyways, thanks for reading!


    Of course! The Protheans! Hahahaha, I'm surprised I missed that...

    Since she'd been captured from another side, I'd been mentally parking her as an enigmatic Prometheus type figure, because my internal Signamancy interpretation defaults to Greek Mythology and history.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    I'd say you're right on both accounts Bibliomancer. Protheans share quite a few traits with Prometheus -- I'd bet Mass Effect designers based their race off of his story. So Promethea is a double reference within a reference to a video game and greek mythology. Try explaining that to someone without a few drinks.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    I'll be honest. I'm in love with this story.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    LunaDivider wrote:
    I'll be honest. I'm in love with this story.


    I'll be doubly honest. I'm a bit in love with you for posting that, despite never having met you. Thanks for reading!

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    Chiming in to add my praise to the praise-pile. This is really good, and I'm impatiently waiting for the next installment.

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    Also really enjoying this story.

    I must say that killing of the queen to be messed up a perfectly good happily ever after torture plot device. And it made me sad ;)

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    Just want to say how great a story this is. It's amazing how much you write in such a short period. I also quite enjoyed your other web serial, The Wandering Inn, and eagerly await the next installments.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    Thank you everyone for reading! Also, to respond to Zyarch and nikohl -- I have slowed down a bit for writing The Last Turn. Instead of two updates per week I can only do one, which is the consequence of writing two other chapters for The Wandering Inn as well.

    Plus, I have a job. That's annoying. But writing The Last Turn is definitely fun -- I just hope I can continue to deliver quality as opposed to quantity. Thanks for reading!

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    It's all good! Real life has to take priority, and I'll be here to read the next chapter when it comes out, whenever that is.

    I'm just the same as most people when it comes to reading - if I get to the end and it's not "the end", I want to read the next bit immediately. 8-)

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    This is a really fantastic story.

    More, please :D

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    Oh, I see where this is going.
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    "He said croak you, but not when." And then more stories. Get all Scheherazade up in here.

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     Post subject: Re: The Last Turn
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    And...we're done. Thanks everyone for reading! Let me know if I made any horrendous mistakes. I just finished this and wanted to get it uploaded. Now...I've got 12 hours to do my Wandering Inn chapter. Huzzah!

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    This was good. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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    I don't feel you should be sorry for the happy ending.

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